Yay! 2 days in a row. i'm proud of me. here's one written 5.14.08. the title is just gonna be in the title now. saves me the trouble of typing it twice(in case you didn't figure that out yet). There are few parts (i.e., the first line of the CHORUS that i'm not sure about), but there are some lines i heart.
Somedays i think you ain't too bright. somedays i could worship the ground you walk on. it's up and down and all around and my head is spinning. somedays all i want to ask is do you want me or not? baby you're drivin' me insane dancin' around what will never be. I know that we've been over this a million times before, but sometthings still aren't clear. CHORUS:I wish that we could just be without all the ups and sowns that you so graciously provide. i know that somethings will never change but everytime i look in your eyes there's something there i just can't shake.// All i want to know is what you're tryin' to hide. It's always there in your eyes. I thought you knew you could tell me anything.I ain't gonna leave baby, not when i've been left so many times before. CHORUS Bein' with you is always a ride, that i can never deny. You have all your secrets that you're tryin' to hide and I'd like to say all that's left is good-bye, but everytime i turn my back, i have to keep looking back.
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Haha, thanks! :p. I didn't actually expect anyone to comment me..
Yeah, they do. All the time. Its one of my favourite shows; Its always on on this english channel called E4.
No! You dont seem rude at all.. What made you think that?
Right; now onto your post :).
You wanted some feed-back on your songs, im gathering? So i decided to on this one, 'cos its your most recent post.
I like the first line of your chorus! Its good because, well, i thinks it sounds good! But, i think you could neaten up the line, 'Its up and down and all around and my head is spinning,' a bit, because the line just doesnt connect as well as some of your others. But this is just my opinion!
Looking at your other lyrics, i actually think you have a talent! There good! :D.
The way i look at it friend you made what your heart says. and for me that is what matters.
We make music to express what we feel on the moment we are making it so i say a 4 thumbs up on a range of 1 to 5.
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